Sunday, October 19, 2014

Changing Times: Now and Then. Rough Draft


Changing Times: Now and Then

Joyce Carol Oates does a good job at depicting “Where Are You Going Where Have You Been.” It was a very interesting read of the realities of changing times that society was facing during that time period. The degree of violence that was coming of age in the time period was just the beginning of a non-stop trend that still resumes today. Society during this time period was too naïve about the stranger danger and I feel that the more it happened over time the more society was using better parenting and getting better information to their children of the stranger danger epidemic that was occurring through our society.

The way that Oates explains the relationship between Connie’s mother and sister June, could this be the reason for the rebellious acts from Connie? Could it be that Connie feels that her mother likes her sister more than she likes her? Oates writes ‘Why don’t you keep your room clean like your sister? How've you got your hair fixed – what the hell stinks? Hairspray? You don’t see your sister using that junk.’(3122). Could the reason be that Connie’s mother is comparing Connie to her sister June? Could it be because all her father did was work, eat, and sleep not spending quality time with the family? Instead of Connie actually going to the movies with her friend, she leaves with a boy to go get something to eat. Was this the change of times in a teenagers life, trying to cut the apron strings? Could this have been her first mistake when it comes to running into Arnold Friend? Could these reasons be some of the same reasons Arnold Friend become the stalker, rapist, and murderer?

When children feel that they their parents are being unfair or they are comparing them to someone else, (like a sibling), it has been proven over time that the child will act out and rebel, or even worse, run away which definitely will leave the child vulnerable and put them in extreme danger. Their irrational behavior is why they are called kids. As adults we have to nurture our children all the same, not treat one a certain way and not the other. When Oates writes the story of Connie being young, impressionable, and naïve, these are the types of things that I feel Oates is trying to imply that parents need to reform when it comes to their children. Naivety is a child worse trait and Connie shows that. Oates writes ‘This is how it is, honey: you come outside and we’ll drive away, have a nice ride. But if you don’t come out we’re gonna wait till your people come home and then they’re all going to get it.’ (3132). Connie was naïve to the fact of talking to strangers. She should’ve lock the doors and called the police when she noticed a strange car coming up the drive.

I interpreted that times were changing for the worse not only for a young woman and her rebellion and deceit, but for society in general. When a community has to worry about a stalker, kidnapper, rapist, and murderer, they have to change their ways of life forever. Nothing will ever be the same as it once was, especially with the disappearance of a young woman from a community. This was a period in time when people could leave their doors unlocked and sleep with their windows open. Society is definitely different now compared to the way it was during the time period that this story was written for these kinds of reasons over time. From the way teenagers were then, the crime rate, and types of crimes, were far less trivial than they are today.

As the type of society that we are, we learn from the past and the mistakes or overlooking that we do. This is why government agencies both state and federal have created programs such as stranger danger, parenting classes, and many others to help not only parents but children as well to learn the dangers that society faces with criminals.

5 comments:

  1. I think your thesis is: "Society during this time period was to naïve about the stranger danger epidemic that was occurring through our society." I think you do a good job using quotes and backing up your thesis. Maybe not so many questions in paragraph 2 and more quotes that you can write about.

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  2. 1.) The author does make it clear in the first paragraph who the author is and what the title of the work is. The introduction wasn't really engaging, it was more just a little confusing. Some of the sentences seemed a little strange, wording-wise. The last sentence felt dragged on, and should probably be punctuated better.

    2.) The thesis, I believe, is: "Society during this time period was too naïve about the stranger danger and I feel that the more it happened over time the more society was using better parenting and getting better information to their children of the stranger danger epidemic that was occurring through our society." I think it uses the idea of the story, but it seems to lean towards outside information primarily. It sounds like it will focus more on societal changes rather than the story.

    3.) I think the writer is focusing more on analysis. I do feel the writer could focus more on the work itself, instead of ideas focused around the work, throughout the paper.

    4.) Textual support is needed throughout. The one line of text support is not really used well, as it needs to be described in context to the thesis. I think most of the claims could use more support.

    5.) I don't necessarily disagree with the writer, I just think the thesis is confusing, therefore the paper doesn't tend to analyze the work. I think once the thesis is condensed, and focused better, the paper will come into its own more.

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  3. 1) I can't quite tell what you're trying to prove from the first paragraph - be sure you have a clear thesis.

    2) "Joyce Carol Oates does a good job at depicting “Where Are You Going Where Have You Been.” It was a very interesting read of the realities of changing times that society was facing during that time period." I think if you reword this, combing the two sentences, you'll have a clearer thesis.

    3) You make a good point about Oates using examples of Connie's naive nature to show what parents need to improve on. But you can just take out, "Their irrational behavior is why they are called kids." it doesn't make sense.

    4) If you're going to say, "it has been proven over time that the child will act out and rebel..." you need to use a source that states it. For one of our short responses, it's no problem but for this, just be sure you've got something concrete. I'm still not even sure by the end what exactly you're PROVING - I see what you're saying about the changes in culture and what parents need to be teaching, but it sounds like your evidence is various examples, but they're not really telling me anything I don't already know. Prof Swindle specifically asked for textual evidence based on stylistic choices and such, try checking more into choice words Oates uses when describing Connie, the family, the town, or Arthur Friend.

    5) We know that times are different - but what makes this story still relevant? Or do you believe the lesson is no longer relevant?

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  4. 1. There really isn't a hook here, it just sort of drops into a rant without really introducing anything.

    2. I'm not really even totally sure what your thesis is. Even by the end I honestly wasn't really even sure where you were going and a proper thesis would have been nice to give me some sort of direction and context.

    3. You didn't really just repeat what was going on in the story, if anything there wasn't enough reference to the story itself, there was a lot of external influence on the essay aside from the original work and I felt like most of the stuff externally influence was kind of irrelevant.

    4. Pretty much every claim needs more/ better support from the actual text. You have a quote about Connie being compared to June and it's kind of irrelevant. It's more of a quote from a passage that involves your topic as opposed to one that directly ties into your topic. You reference the results of studies on the effect of siblings being compared to each other by the parents without actually referencing any studies, and even if you had, they aren't really important to a lit analysis essay.

    5. I don't totally agree with the point you're trying to make with the essay as a whole. I didn't feel like the original work was as much about times changing for the worse as much as it was more about what the changing times meant for youth and growing up.

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  5. Corey,
    Review the essay assignment sheet and examples again. You don't really have a close reading here...more of a contextual reading with interpretation. You need to focus on the language and a literary element of the story instead. Let me know if you have questions or would like to discuss your paper.
    ~MS

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