tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4375071335679640824.post8059778800621657614..comments2023-10-11T06:26:01.345-07:00Comments on American Literature After 1945 Fall 2014: Rough Draft Essay 1Anonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15859084138187073439noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4375071335679640824.post-13445350007240656972014-10-26T19:38:03.591-07:002014-10-26T19:38:03.591-07:00Sarah,
This is a good start, and I think your topi...Sarah,<br />This is a good start, and I think your topic is intriguing... A few opportunities for improvement:<br />Don't start with your thesis. You need an introduction and put your thesis at the end of the first paragraph.<br />"He is a symbol of man who is part of society who follows all the rules and lives his life as he has ben told to." Make sure you support claims like this... <br />Also, make sure you spend more time and really zoom in on the quotes you are analyzing. Why does Kerouac use the word "inconsiderate"?<br />You need more evidence of how Kerouac is depicting the bum and the hobo and specifically linking the bum to conformity and what Kerouac saw as wrong with society (BE SPECIFIC). Your essay needs more development.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15859084138187073439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4375071335679640824.post-14820206958672683892014-10-25T13:11:10.508-07:002014-10-25T13:11:10.508-07:00"He has created a hierarchy of hobos to symbo..."He has created a hierarchy of hobos to symbolize the difference between individuals who through non-conformity to society remain healthy and spiritually enlightened and individuals who go along with the prevailing beliefs without questioning anything". I think that this is your thesis sentence. Your last paragraph (conclusion) is supported throughout your essay. You probably need to re-read parts of you essay again. There is one paragraph 2 that should read free from?? I think. I thought your language and your numerous quotes to support your thesis was good. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13961819377627868572noreply@blogger.com